My Shared Story Written with Josh

In the far north in austrulia a strong man named Mathu was fishing for some Blue Morwong. (Queen Snapper) But after half an hour of fishing a croc came to the fishing area he was at.

SNAP! The Croc broke the engine with Its victorious teeth. “HELP!” Mathu shouted but there was no use he was at a lake where nobody fishes. He starts sprinting around the boat to find something useful. He trips over the fishing net *SPLASH!* His paddles fall into the lake. “WHY ME?!?”

There was only one thing to do… Get his spear and swim. *SPLASH* He Jumped Into the lake and threw the spear at the Crocodile. He nearly missed it. The Croc was still alive but It was slower, he had an advantage because he was an Olympic Swimmer. Mathu got to shore pulling himself up weakly while puffing heavily. He looked at his boat with terror. He brought some fish while he was swimming away from the crocodile.

This is my school work I've been working on the past week

Term 2 writing

This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.

We have used the following criteria to guide us:

• Changing the word order of a sentence
• Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and  personification
• Using specific verbs and adjectives
• Using  show, don’t tell techniques
• Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
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• Show Don’t Tell

Sadness

I got up at the crack of dawn and competed my stupid dumb job the paper run.when I got back me and Brocky play call of duty but suddenly the power went out so we turned the xbox back on but again a huge boom the tv flicked off and stem zoomed out of the xbox now the power is out. When it came back on the tv was roasted and the xbox is overcooked I started balling my eyes out because my mum and dad were out I was thinking they're going to be very grumpy and depressed because my xbox died

Happiness

When I got back from camp my family called me and Brocky into my parents room and there was my brand spanking new tv and xbox. I’m standing right there with my mouth wide open strat after that I’m crying happy tears and screaming.

Anger

Early in the morning I wanted to play on my xbox I’m putting the disk in the xbox and there was nothing inside the cover ( I knew it kade stole it ) I scrunch up my tied hands and and stomped over to my scooter and raced to kade’s house to get my game    

Music writing

The Candy Robbery

I got into the car and turned onto Chocolate Candy Street to the candy factory. I walked In then grabbed my Hot Chocolate Gun and shot the guards and blew up the vault with my Pop Rocks. I quickly grabbed all the Candy Canes but suddenly I got shot with a Juice Gun. Luckily I had Super Heavy Chocolate Armour on. I sprinted outside to my Audi R8 and drove off to my secret lair.

Viking girl

Today at school it's dress up day and my horrible mean mum forces me to dress up as a viking. On my way to school I sore kids some

kids that weren't dressed up the kids walk over and said you mong dress up day is tomorrow I turn red and sweat runs down my face like a avallach. I decided to run home like the flash ohh I forgot my stupid older brother is not at school today I arrived at home and he said I got you , then starts cracking up laughing. I’m now sweating even harder , I can’t believe he got me .    

By Riley Irain